Learning Journal Two

Step Two

I am writing this blog post the same day of finishing week two of UWP1. Starting early and making deadlines before this blog is due next Friday at 10am, will give me time to read and revise my writing before I publish it. Scrambling to write a blog post the night or morning before this post is due, would simply be like giving myself a “timed writing exam”. What I mean by that was explained by Mr.Z today, who was able to connect time writing exams to procrastinating and writing our blog posts before they were due. By first making the class come up with pros and cons of having a timed writing, we as a class we came up with more cons than pros, for example: not enough time, having stress and panic, producing a poorly structured essay, ideas not fully developed. And it does make sense that by waiting till the night before to start on an assignment and turning it in hours or minutes before it’s due is like having a timed writing exam. We are putting ourselves in the position of panic, stress and time constraint in order to quickly finish and turn in an assignment. With this new perspective, it’ll give me more of an incentive to start on my assignments earlier.
This week in class we read The Power of Captions: Words Added to Pictures by Austin Kleon. In his article he describes how a photo can be interpreted in different ways by the way the picture is captioned. He stresses that there is no need for Photoshop or any form of photo manipulation because the choices of words can change the meaning of the photograph all together. With this, we can now caption our photos for the Living Picture assignment in a way that makes the readers also experience our own thoughts and feelings when the photo was taken.
Secondly, we learned that the “five page essay” is an ineffective way to write an essay. It is not possible to include all your thoughts and analysis in a standard introduction, three body paragraph and conclusion style essay format. Each main point in an essay should have it’s own paragraph. That way the essay is more organized and also reduces confusion for the reader.

Step Three.

Main ideas for literacy narrative:

  1. Description of feelings, emotions, ect. felt trying out for track
  2. Beginning practice and track season
  3. Sophomore year: becoming a 400m runner/becoming varsity/opportunity to run at CIF prelims
  4. Jr. year: struggles
  5. Sr year: trying to redeem myself and end the season well
  6. What I learned

Step Five.

What I hope to get out of peer review is constructive criticism and comments that will help me improve on my writing. Following what Straub and Stewart said will help me be a good peer reviewer. For instance, making equal amounts of praise and criticism comments on their paper. Also focusing on helping someone with their organization, flow, and content will greatly help the student when they go back to revise. If we were to focus on only just their grammar and spelling, it won’t help them improve their writing because those are just the little mistakes that could be fixed during final papers. In addition, providing comments in the margins will prevent cramming comments in between the authors work. The type of comments shouldn’t be vague or short either because this won’t provide enough information for the writer to improve their work.


2 thoughts on “Learning Journal Two

  1. I like how your outline is so precise! Your outline really did translate to what you wrote in your essay. Reading and watching how to peer review also helped me learn how to do a better peer review. I learned a lot from those two sources and will continue to use them for our future papers. I also really like how you started in your opening of this blog. It gave me as a reader a better vibe for reading your journal!


  2. You remind me of a good point from Straub and Stewart. Giving praises as well as criticism helps the writer by encouraging them on what they did well. Also, I really like your outline. It is short but there is definitely a story and structure going on. I agree with the comment above that your opening for this blog post made us feel like actual readers/followers instead of classmates. It was very creative!


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